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[QUOTE]Originally posted by PsyLiam: [QB] I know I'm correct for the UK. Whether I'm correct for the US is another matter. Of course, you're all retards incapable of using debit cards and mobile phones, so I win. And Aban is right. But I don't think it's a case of using the word "position" twice. Rather, you are repeating yourself. Say it out loud. "I saw a posting for a position and I would like to apply for that position. You also mention that you are applying for the job in order to gain work experience, yet four lines later say that it's with the aim of paying for your tuition fees. I'd put both reasons together, otherwise it sounds like you've suddenly remembered the fees thing and stuck it in. Something like "I would like to apply for the position of _____ that I saw advertised on ______, with the aim of broadening my work experience and paying for my tuition costs." Then move on to "I graduated from blah blah blah...while there, I was able to blah blah blah". Provides more structure. GPA stands for "grade point average", right? If so, you've written "[I] have a grade point average equivalent to a B- average". I'm not totally sure on American grammar usage around that abbreviation, but howabout "I attained a B- GPA and became better prepared for university"? (this also puts the two events in a more chronological order). This also might be an American thing, but do you say "you can contact me at 534 etc", rather than "you can contact me ON 3424 etc"? Oh, and turn of flush indenting. Put that with Times New Roman in the "never ever use" box. Show us the letter before you send it off, so that we can make sure it's perfect. (I've just been fiddling with Word. The thing Charles says produces a similar effect, except that a box also appears on the page. I can't get just the corner marks to come up. Could you show us your option-view window?) [/QB][/QUOTE]
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