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[QUOTE]Originally posted by OnToMars: [QB] Is there anyway you could at least TRY to present two sides of an argument? At all?? And there's really no conflict to it. Drama is conflict. Without conflict, you don't have a play. It's all too easy. $$$$ Omega's play spoilers $$$$ | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | | Lady checks in, lady gives them book, they read, they conquer the planet. The end. Someting needs to oppose them to make a good conflict. Maybe they resist, but the patients revolt against it. Maybe the grandfather was a patient who was part of the rebellion. Or if you want to be more traditional, maybe one of the other attendees resisted and held firm to the secular philosophy, and threatened to turn them in to Big Brother. Also, the dialogue could use a little tightening. Try to listen to the way people talk in real life, today, around you and imitate that style. Oh, and watch "One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest" for an awesome psych ward movie. [/QB][/QUOTE]
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