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Posted by Mythril (Member # 286) on :

Here is the first three chapters of a Buffy Fan ficion i am working on. I would really apreciate your oppinions.

You know the drill copy and paste
http://io.spaceports.com/~necros/Img/stories/Chapters/Other_Stories/buffy.htm

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Posted by Fabrux (Member # 71) on :

I don't like Buffy so I'm not going to read that...

Sorry.

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Posted by Mythril (Member # 286) on :

Your loss.

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[This message has been edited by Necromancer (edited March 18, 2000).]

Posted by Sunspot (Member # 77) on :

Not really his loss... I couldn't even finish it. The grammatical errors were driving me crazy! =\

Get it Beta-read or run it through a spellcheck/grammarcheck program.

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Posted by Vacuum robot lady from Spaceballs (Member # 239) on :

I started to read it, but as with Sunspot, couldn't finish. Present tense stories are very hard to read.

And you don't NEED to add a qualifier to each line of dialogue. Lines like this bog down a story immensely:

"Hi." He says cheerfully.
"Hey yourself." She says jokingly.
"What'cha doin'?" He asks interestedly.
"I don't know." She says as she walks to the door.

[This message has been edited by Ultra Magnus (edited March 18, 2000).]

Posted by Baloo (Member # 5) on :

Literary criticism: Painful but necessary.

I think I got farther than the rest, and paid no attention to the errors. I'm just not a buffy fan. If you served me a Vegan dinner, you would have gotten much the same reaction. Not your fault.

The spelling and grammar, however, are important. It pays to take your work to someone who's never seen it and have them look it over. It's amazing how the perfect story in your mind can get garbled betwixt thought and presentation.

Grit your teeth, bare your chest, and let them start stabbing. It only hurts for a little while, until you realize it's only scratches. It'll improve your writing a lot, once you learn not to take it personally. If you didn't take it personally, good for you! It took me a little while to get to that stage.

Constructive criticism is very important to writing. That's why newspapers pay their editors more than their writers.

--Baloo

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Posted by Mythril (Member # 286) on :

yeah, this was a spur of the moment kind of thing. And i am used to people critizing my work, so it does not bother me.

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